“Hello everypony, Snogwritts here!”
“I recently just finished reading, “Written Script’s bad day,” by The Bricklayer and
I do have a lot of thoughts about this fic.”
“So, without further a do, let’s get right to it.”
“Okay so let’s start with the main character, Written Script, a grumpy old stallion.
The fic starts off with Written Script receiving a letter from his cousin, Raindrops.
She needed a place to stay after some unfortunate events, and it seems that Script hasn’t
really gotten ready yet.”
“Huh?
Who can that be?
Hold on fellow viewer, it’ll be just a moment.”
“Come in!”
“Who would ever come at this- Gasp*
“Diamond tiara!?
Get...out…”
“Don’t you act dumb with me, you know exactly why I’m upset!
Dragons and ponies don’t mix!”
“Scram!
And never come back.”
“Sigh* I’m so sorry you had to see that, I haven’t lost my temper like that in a
while…”
“Hey, is that a box she left?”
“I swear if it’s another chi-
BOOM!
“I swear that filly….”
“Oh?”
“Uh…
Back to the review..”
“This fic shows a great storyline, especially for a slice of life fic.
The plot flows and created an interesting scenario for the story, so, regards to the
author for that.”
“Although, something bothers me about this fic.
The beginning was….
Umm, could be better.
But, the author did do a good job to introduce us to main character, but sometimes I feel
like theres details that don’t really contribute to the story.
In other words, there were irrelevant details.
Think of it as menacing beasts eating up the value and interest of your story.”
“There some things that I don’t really need to know in order to relate to this character.
I can tell author was very focused on making the character relatable as possible, but sometimes
less is more in writing.
Remember, you want to engage your reader, not bore them with irrelevant details.”
“Stories come out of relationships.
To author who wrote this fic, if you want to reveal a lot about your character, set
them in a critical incident or conversation.
In fact, you’ve already done this.
Let me give an example, when making friendships, you don’t need to know absolutely EVERYTHING
about the person.
Now that I think about it, that sounds creepy, but still.
You can know so much information prior to meeting somepony, but if you have an actual
conversation with them it reveals a lot more.”
“In writing, you need to trust yourself as much as you trust your reader.
Writing these abundant details time to time can sometimes make them feel like the writer
is holding their hand and not trusting on their intelligence.”
“In fact, that leads to my next point.
The plot maybe well placed together, but the pacing was a bit slow.
Good pacing is essential to keep your reader interested, again, irrelevant details.”
“Be confident when you're writing, if you fail at first, try again.
Every story is learning opportunity, just learn learn from your mistakes and you’ll
prosper.
I know I say this all the time, but you don’t know how many authors forget this.”
“There's one more thing though, the story's conflict definitely was well put together.
It really reveals the main character's true self.”
“Overall, this story was decent, definitely well put together, but the story wasn’t
engaging.”
“So, I’m going to give this fanfic, two quills out of five.”
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“Alright, that’s it for me, this is Snogwritts, signing out.”
Thanks for watching!