“Hello everypony, Snogwritts here.
I recently just finished reading “You’re a terrible liar” By YoshiFawful64 and I
do have a lot thoughts about this fic, so without further or do let’s get right to
it”
“Ok so let’s start with the main characters.
Or should I say lovely couple of Rainbow dash and Applejack”
“The fic starts off with a party at princess Twilight's castle.
Pinkie sense has been taken into action and it seems that it meant something very interesting.
That is, somepony will be in love tonight”
“Although, now that I think about it, I never believed Pinkie sense.
Heh please, she said something about watching out for big objects.
Heheh, see?
Utter nonsense, there's no way that's happ-
“Haha!
Take that pinkie sense!”
“Uh oh”
Please stand by...
“Sigh* Note to self, mares are always, sigh* right.
“When Pinkie made that prediction it actually ended up to be Rainbow and Applejack.
But what’s interesting is that Applejack already had feelings for Rainbow, which caused
some well… revealing moments.
The fic continues from there, but while reading it, I do have have to say that the conflict
surrounding the two of them in this story was a brilliant idea."
“The conflict sounds natural and ultimately realistic that really brought this story forward,
especially how it ended.”
“Although, what I think could've been a nice addition is well, get the other characters
involved.
The author did mention about some things that Rainbow settled as well as the cameos in the
beginning, but I think adding those scenes or at least one of them can tell us more about
Rainbows character.”
“However, I do have a bit of a concern and that is, the relationship kind of well felt
forced than natural.
This is a common flaw I see in a lot of Appledash fics and it’s definitely present in this
one.
Just because Applejack confessed that she loved her doesn’t mean Rainbow can automatically
fall in love with her, it doesn’t seem to make sense.
What I suggest to the author is to go in depth about not just Applejacks feelings, but Rainbows
as well.”
“That actually leads to another problem, the writer seems focused on Applejacks feelings
more than Rainbows.
When it comes to romance fics, you need to go in depth on the feelings of not just one
but both characters.
This can definitely be a great opportunity to add tone to this fic.”
“This story has a very unique plot point, the way the story started with pinkie's pinkie
sense was a nice addition that made it fairly interesting to read.
Always try to experiment in writing you never know if might work for you.”
“Overall, this Appledash fic was great, but I believed fixing a few things will make
this story even better”
“So I’m going to give this fanfic, 3 quills out of five”
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“Alright that’s it for me, this Snogwritts, signing out.”